Students, please
read this note before clicking on the link below.
This paper is the real deal,
written by an undergraduate in one of my English classes during the 2008-09
academic year.
It has been anonymized, and the author has given me permission to use it
as a sample. I retain the copyright
privileges
to his/her
work.
Is it the best paper I've ever received from a
student? Is it
perfect? No on both counts, but it is in almost every respect
an
exemplary, solid "A" paper that can serve as a practical model for most
students. This particular student
was very
bright--that
much is perfectly clear--but, more important than this, he/she was
well-organized, put a lot of thought into
phrasing and
accurate syntax and grammar, followed instructions, and developed a sound
thesis, which is well supported
with close
reading. I firmly believe that most
students can do the same, if only they take the time and put in the sweat.
This paper is a good model not
because it displays effortless genius, but because it displays hard work and
plenty of
forethought.
You'll notice my comments in
the right margin. I haven't
commented on every good and bad thing about the essay, only
those
aspects of it that might help to clarify for you why it earned the grade it
did. You do not need to have read
The Sun
Also Rises to
appreciate this sample, and the paper will not be of less use to you because (as
they case may be) your
assignment
is compare/contrast and this one is based on a single work. As my comments indicate, this is a rhetorical model:
consider the
author's organization, his/her style, and the kind of thesis and analysis he/she
uses. That's the point of this
sample.